Complete Task 2 response to an General question seen in Dhaka (June 11)

(This question taken from www.ielts-blog.com.)

In many countries, crime is increasing.  What are the main reasons for this?  What can be done to improve the situation?  Support your position with relevant examples and include your own experience.

Although it is arguably impossible to pinpoint a single cause for the recent rise in global crime, the main culprits are thought to be poverty and political oppression.  A commonality between the two appears to be the dissatisfaction of a people.  Thus, it is argued that global crime can be reduced through measures that promote public feelings of well-being and security.  To prove this, strategies that reduce poverty and oppression will be analyzed.

Firstly, encouraging prosperity among poverty-stricken areas can be a very powerful tool when combating crime.  For example, a once dangerous area of my hometown in Ottawa has undergone major infrastructural development over the past twenty years.  The addition of schools, libraries and quality health facilities led to the establishment of a new economical status for the people who lived there.  With the rise of this new affluence came a major fall in crime rates.  This clearly shows how tackling the issue of poverty creates inroads against violations of the law.

In addition to this, providing people more political freedom can also reduce crime.  For instance, over the past ten years China has increasingly allowed critical comment of its ruling party to appear in local newspapers.  Despite the fact that this level of freedom pales in comparison with many other countries, it is felt this thawing of political control has done a lot to reduce crime rates across the country.  Thus, providing increasing levels of political freedom can be seen as a measure to combat crime.

After analyzing the reduction of poverty and political oppression, it is felt that crime is best tackled by reducing the causes of unrest among people.  By following this course of action, major reductions in global crime rates are expected.

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3 Responses to Complete Task 2 response to an General question seen in Dhaka (June 11)

  1. Niyant says:

    Hi Ryan,

    I saw your essay and I was impressed. I want to get 6 bands in writing or above. I have just appeared for the ielts exam on 11th June and I received L:8 R:7 W:5.5 S:6. My requirement is 6 in each module with overall 6.

    Could you please advise me how can I achieve more score in writing?

    Yours Sincerely,
    Niyant Patel

  2. Heidi says:

    Hi Ryan,

    I just have an inquiry about your response to this essay topic.

    In your first paragraph, the introduction, you wrote “A commonality between the two appears to be the dissatisfaction of a people.” And my question is, why did you use “a people” instead of “a person”?

    Regards,
    Heidi

    • Ryan says:

      Hi Heidi,

      Here, I was talking about a group of individuals, not just one person. Perhaps a couple of examples will help clarify how to use ‘a people’:

      Canadians are a people with strong ties to the United Kingddom and France.
      Russians, as a people, are experiencing setbacks brought about by brain drain.

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