(Model essay) Academic essay question as seen on 10 March 2012 in Sydney, Australia

It is expected that in the future old people are going to outnumber young people in many countries. Do you feel this is a positive or negative development?

In many parts of the world, the ratio of older people to younger people is swelling. Although an ageing population does pose a few benefits, I argue that this trend is more negative than positive in nature. This will be shown by looking at how a large elderly populace strains a society’s public health resources and deters a country’s younger members from having children of their own.

For one, the aged require extra attention from a country’s public health services, and this can put pressure on an economy. For example, ageing Canadians increasingly depend on free public health care that is funded by taxpayers. As the number of elderly Canadians increases, financing their medical needs is expected to put immense stress on the Canadian economy. Thus, this example makes it clear that growing numbers of old people in a society is a negative phenomenon.

In addition to this, younger people are often deterred from having children of their own when they are faced with the burden of caring for an elderly family member. In Japan, for example, fertility rates stagnated during the twentieth century in part due to the load many families had to bear in looking after older relatives. This example illustrates the link that exists between larger numbers of elderly people and reduced birthrates. As lower birthrates are typically unhealthy for a country, it is obvious that the trend of ageing populations is not a positive one.

As the above evidence shows, there are many drawbacks to nations with heavy weightings of old people. In the future, society and government can be expected to change to deal with this trend.

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9 Responses to (Model essay) Academic essay question as seen on 10 March 2012 in Sydney, Australia

  1. Anonymous says:

    Hey Ryan, I did this essay for my IELTS exam on last 10th, but I wrote about both plosives and negatives developments and in the conclusion I states that there are positives than the drawbacks, is that wrong because the question asked “whether it is a posive OR negative development”

    Do you think I will lose marks for task respond? Pls advice..

    You’re essays are very useful, thanks for you’re support.:
    Best regards

    • Ryan says:

      @Anonymous It is possible your essay question was not exactly the same as the essay question I have here. I think you could respond to this question in a discussion essay format, but it would probably be a lot more straightforward to use a simple argument essay structure. Anyway, there is nothing you can do about it now. Let’s hope for the best.

  2. Hi sir.it is really interesting ail see you easy and letters.really it is very helpfull to me.end of the month i have exam..thanks a lot that you have been sending mail IELTS.

  3. Anonymous says:

    hi ryan, your blogs and ebook is helping me a lot in my ielts prep.i m sitting again academic ielts for my visa screen renewal. and i needed to score better this time….thanks a heap!

  4. tanzeen says:

    this is hard !!!

  5. Adel Ansari says:

    I don’t have any idea !!!

  6. Radmila says:

    Hello , dear Ryan!
    With the help of your essays and tips you gave me, I wrote quite a good essay for writing task 2, I want to express my gratitude to you! And will certainly share my score as I receive it (this week, I hope).

    Once again, I write the sinonyms I have found in Ryan`s essay, it is very helpful)) And came in handy in IELTS exam)

    is swelling- growing numbers, larger numbers

    Older people- an ageing population, elderly populace, the aged, ageing, old people

    a society’s public health resources- a country’s public health services, free public health care, medical needs

    strain- put pressure, to put immense stress

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