(Model essay) Academic exam as seen in Vietnam, Australia and Malaysia in August 2011

(This question taken from www.ielts-blog.com.)

Some people think that schools are merely turning children into good citizens and workers, rather than benefitting them as individuals.  To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Education and the schooling experience have evolved in the wake of new technologies such as the Internet.  This in turn has had a profound effect on the training students receive and the ultimate people they become upon graduating.  It is disagreed that schools today are producing mechanically-thinking workers and refraining from developing students as individuals.  This will be shown by looking at the current changes underway in both modern and traditional school systems.

Firstly, many modern school curriculums are becoming computerized and this is doing a lot to encourage student development as individuals.  Take South Korea, for example.  Traditionally, Korean classrooms were packed with forty students and this provided very little face time between instructor and pupil.  However, under a new government policy, all students are to receive tablet computers to allow them greater opportunity for interaction with their teachers and each other.  In addition to this, these tablet computers also provide access to other learning resources that may cater to the particular needs of gifted or challenged young people.  As this shows, the argument that today’s schools do not benefit pupils as individuals holds little merit.

In addition to this, trends within the developing world are also gravitating towards providing students with individualized school curriculums.  In China, for example, middle and high school youths today are free to select a number of elective courses that allow them to demonstrate their skills in areas they are particularly strong in as well as develop their unique identities.  As schooling continues to become more tailored to the needs of young people, it is difficult to see how the argument that schools do not produce dynamically thinking individuals holds much water.

After looking at how the world’s schools are increasingly making efforts to meet the needs of individual students, it is hard to see the plausibility of any counter argument.  Thus, it is hoped the educational experience of young people will continue to evolve in a manner that meets their needs.

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5 Responses to (Model essay) Academic exam as seen in Vietnam, Australia and Malaysia in August 2011

  1. Thanks and I would be grateful to you all the time for sharing this resource with us

  2. chaohsienwu says:

    Hi, Ryan

    Your many articles about writing, along with your video lessons, are popular among students and teachers alike. All benefit from your good work. Congratulations!

    In sample essays, you give reasons and examples to support the thesis of an essay. While all these are good points, some are very different from personal experiences in China.

    Laugh a lot.

  3. saleena says:

    thank you ; this is a real help for the ielts students

  4. shreekesh says:

    You are great sir

  5. jc23 says:

    I had this same question when i took the exam here in the Philippines last August too.

    Honestly, i was confused with the question. I got 6.5 in writing and failed again for the 2nd time this year. Ill be taking again IELTS this coming December 10. Praying that the question will not be as complicated or a bit confusing such as this one.

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