(Model essay) Academic question as seen in Vietnam in late November

Posted on 22 December 2011 by Ryan

(This question taken from ielts-blog.com.)

Economic growth has helped to improve standards of living all over the world. However, some research shows that people in developing countries are happier with this trend than people in developed countries. Explain why you think this is.

Developments in the global economy mean different things to different people. To some, recent growth may be coupled with a rise in standards of living, and thus seen as positive. To others, this growth brings with it increased global competitiveness, and is thus seen as negative. These particular opinions are thought to reflect the results of recent research indicating more satisfaction with global growth among the developing world than the developed world. Both sides will be analysed in this essay.

It is easy to understand why global economic growth is welcomed among developing countries. In China, for example, young people today have vastly more developed lifestyles than their parents or grandparents. Today many Chinese people consume luxury goods, an ability seldom possible 30 years ago. From this example, it is easy to understand why people in developing countries see current global economic growth as a reason to be happy.

However, the economic rise of developing countries makes for more competition among developed countries. For example, microprocessor design, a field once dominated by countries with highly developed education systems, is now an area into which developing countries are making serious inroads. Because of this, the once technical giants of the developed world are now seeing their market share decline. This example makes it clear why developed countries are not entirely happy about the economical growth of developing countries.

I feel the above reasons explain why research results indicate the opinions of developed and developing countries contrast on this topic. So long as this trend continue, these viewpoints should not be expected to change much.

 

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8 Responses to (Model essay) Academic question as seen in Vietnam in late November

  1. shaz says:
    23 December 2011 at 3:30 am

    sir,in question they were asking that people in developing countries are happier with this trend than people in developed countries.but in your answer it is showing that developing countries people are not happy while developed country people are happy which is opposite to the question.

  2. mohammed sawadah says:
    24 December 2011 at 8:45 pm

    hi ~ i try the iltes test 7 time ~ i got 4.5 & 5 ,,
    i want 5.5 help me

  3. Anonymous says:
    26 December 2011 at 9:50 am

    Development in the global economy has advantage and dis advantage.
    Some people wants in a developing country which means the life here is easy and not conflict to their life.The cost of living here is low.And their life is simple.But they don’t know that there is a strong correlation between low income and high population growth.

    To others they much preferred in developed country,because they allows all their citizen to enjoy a free and healthy living in their environment.That is why its seems the people in developed country are happier than in developing country.The dis advantage in developed country is the cost of living here is higher than developing country.

    This is just only my own opinion why they are contrast between developing and developed country.

  4. Dr Amir(Australia) says:
    16 January 2012 at 8:35 pm

    Shaz,
    I think you are missing the meanings of the topic?
    Try again,its easy to understand.This my problem aswell.I just start writing without properly analysing the topic.
    regards

  5. Claudia Lane says:
    5 March 2012 at 7:19 am

    Hi Ryan,

    After studying your videos I undestand this is a Discussion essay answer type.

    Could you please explain why you didn’t give your opinion in the conclusion?

    I know in the conclusion paragraph we find a summary/statement of position and a prediction/ recommendation sentence. So in this case you made a summary, right?

    I feel that we need to state our position/opinion because the question says “why you think this is”

    I really appriciate if you can clarify this for me.

    Many thanks,

    Claudia

    • Ryan says:
      7 March 2012 at 1:10 am

      Hi Claudia,

      Sorry for the delay. I thought that I did state a position with the sentence that starts, ‘It is felt’. ‘It is felt’ is passive language for, ‘I feel that’.

      No, I did not make a summary, I made a prediction.

      Thank you for the question. I see a few others from you below and will tend to them now.

      Ryan

  6. Claudia Lane says:
    12 March 2012 at 9:54 am

    Hi Ryan,

    Thanks for the response, I really appreciate.

    I always struggle a bit with conclusion as you can see in most of my questions…:(

    I will keep practsing and watching your videos.

    Regards,

    Claudia

  7. iden says:
    29 May 2012 at 8:13 pm

    Hi Ryan
    I am really very impressed and admiring your wonderful teaching.

    Kindly, just want to understand the question analysis. is this is an argue essay or it is opinion essay? your respond (as i think) was on argue base, I did practice test on this before reading your respond and I did (in my practice) an opinion essay. Please advice

    Thank you

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