(This model Academic Task 1 answer was written in response to a question seen on an IELTS exam held in Ireland in April of 2012. Please leave your suggestion as a comment to this post.)
___________Insert your sentence here!____________. Consumption for all countries varied between 1800 and 3350 calories and the differences seen do not appear to be sensitive to continent.
Perhaps not surprisingly, the country with the highest caloric intake was the United States, with a staggering 3350 calories consumed per day on average. Not far behind was New Zealand, where people consumed about 3200 calories per day during the year in question. Intakes for Spain and Mexico were slightly higher than 2500 calories per day. On the lower side of the spectrum were countries like China, at 2200 daily calories, India, as 2100 daily calories, and Somalia and Indonesia, both at roughly 1800 calories per day. When comparing the highest and lowest values, it appears as though Americans in 2003 ingested almost twice as much food as Indonesians.
The values presented in this graph are thought to be reflective of the diet, lifestyle and culture of each country.
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The chart shows the average caloric intake in 2003,
The given bar graph depicts that, average calorie intake in eight selected countries in the year 2003.
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As is shown by the table, there was the average of caloric intake by the representative countries of continents in 2003.
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Writing task 2 , General Training exam on 26 May 2012 Melbourne Australia
The bar chart illustrates the average calories recorded in eight different countries in the 2003 intake.
@Henry Please finish with a full stop instead of a comma. Your suggestion would be better if it pointed out that the data is talking about several countries (as opposed to cities, people, …).
@Kiran Your response is awkward. Why is there a comma after ‘that’?
@Anthony Flawless.
@Lead OK, but watch your grammar: ‘describes’.
@Kiendung That sentence is very awkward.
@Barnabas Your topic sentence is a sentence fragment.
@Alla That sounds like a sentence fit to open an essay. Here, we need a description of what we see in the source.
@Sharifah Don’t forget ‘the’ before ‘United States’.
@Marinella That sentence is awkward and grammatically incorrect.
@Puja OK
@Bahga Your sentence is awkward and grammatically incorrect. But you are on the right track. Try: ‘The graph illustrates the average number of calories consumed in eight different countries in 2003.’
@Erynn Flawless.
@Anonymous That sentence does not start with a capital letter, nor does it finish with a full stop!
@Palwinder The same goes for you!
@Christina Try this: …number of calories which were consumed…
@Seham Please watch the spacing between your commas. What is the ‘500s calories’ about?
@Maram Both of your sentences are unfortunately awkward. Try something like: ‘The bar chart shows the average number of calories consumed in a handful of countries in 2003.’
@Neda Aside from the small typo, your sentence looks pretty good.
@Min Don’t forget the ‘s’ at the end of ‘illustrates’ (this is important!). Why are you writing about ‘protein’?
@JV Flawless.
@Neha OK
@Setareh There are spacing issues with your commas, a spelling error and don’t forget ‘the’ in front of ‘United States’.
@Kulsoom The graph isn’t really divided into ‘continents’, but aside from this your sentence looks pretty good.
@Like Your sentence is awkward.
@JV Where is your full stop? Your sentence looks good, but I would take out the article ‘the’.
@Pisces Flawless.
@Lexie The calories are not ‘taken’ but rather ‘consumed’, ‘ingested’ or ‘eaten’.
@Paritosh Your sentence looks good, but I would change ‘mean calories intake’ to ‘mean caloric intake’.
@Sarah There is only one chart.
@Bakary The data source does not show the calories that were ‘recorded’, but rather the calories that were ‘consumed’. You need to move the word ‘intake’ from the end of your sentence and inject it where it belongs mid-sentence. Try something like: ‘The bar chart illustrates the average caloric intake recorded among eight countries in 2003.’
Thanks for your correction.What do you mean with ;there are spacing issues with the cammas.Can i ask you to explain a bit more,please?
The bar graph depicts the average caloric consumption in eight different countries in the year of 2003
Hi Ryan,
Thank you for your correction.Did you mean by grammatically error the use of perfect tense?
The graph shows the caloric intake of 8 different countries in the year 2003 in an average.
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